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Post by Jacob Black on Mar 2, 2009 22:16:33 GMT -6
okay so everything is fine except for the history, you should make it look more like a twilight vampire attacked him, the mechanics of twilight vampire is mearly a super beautiful person with red eyes if they feed on humans, gold if they feed on animals. and vampires dont gather like what is said in the history, truely covens are never larger then 2 to 3. the voturi, the cullens and the denali covens are all very weird when it comes to this part. also your powers should not be so huge, there is one person in the twilight saga who can, if she grabs you. can put a vampire flat on his/her back which in this universe is a hard thing to do. maybe you can send small bolt to medium right now, for the powers do normaly esculate over time, but as im not sure if any one had the ability to shock anyone with bolt of lightning in their first life you may want to re-think that
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